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Escape



Some eskimos escaped
from the Arctic Circle.
The world opened up.

For some
it was too much
and the path was
broken
and unrecognizable
and nothing prepared them for the noise
and destruction
and the loss of sustenance
and community;
and the heat
burned
and they didn't make it.

I honor them here.

They still speak
in their god voice
that goes back to
the beginning of known
and unknown
time
out of energy that formed
the Orca
out of creation words first spoken
reenacted daily
as they visualize
New Time.

For the rest
Patti Smith and Laurie Anderson and Joan Jett
spoke to them in tongues
and were their salvation.
And their words went out
into the ears
and poems of the eskimo
and the words meant
don't abandon dreams
don't let dreams abandon you
you have something to say
say them here
say them now.

Though it seemed to be
a long time coming,
in metaphysical terms,
not so much.

Ancient soul
energy is now allowed
to be redefined
and though it may be
unrecognizable
to the ancient shaman
sitting in the steppes of Mongolia

waiting

that old soul
can now be found
at three
sitting on the front step
of a small western house
drinking orange juice
and feeling like an old man.

They are still here
we are still here
I am still here
with a new song.

May 26, 2008
update 12:18 p.m.

Date: 2008-05-26 05:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lintninja.livejournal.com
Wow. I love that. I can see images so clearly with that. Thank you for sharing it.

Date: 2008-05-26 05:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tamiam.livejournal.com
Thanks for reading! I saw Patti Smith last night and was inspired.

Date: 2008-05-26 05:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sculpin.livejournal.com
It's beautiful. You know I don't say that kind of thing lightly, right? I love the contrasts. The orange juice gave me chills -- there's all this big stuff you're saying, and then it all comes down to a tiny, precise point in space-time, where you show that this immense, divine richness exists in one particular person doing an ordinary thing, feeling an ordinary way.

One note didn't ring right to me: "community". I keep seeing "community" used as a weasel word here and there, especially in the phrase "community leaders", which seems often to translate as "obnoxious men who declare that they're in charge". And the trend guys have been hopping all over that word for a few years. So for me, that line would have worked better as something more explicit.

Date: 2008-05-26 05:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tamiam.livejournal.com
I just wrote it last night, so there could be more rewrites, though it seemed pretty complete coming out. I think a lot about community and I very consciously helped build at least three communities, two of which I don't think are viable any longer, which caused me to rethink a lot about what sustains me. So I chose that word purposefully there, though I did cut down a phrase to just that word, because I knew what I meant. But it's true, there could be more explicitness going on, perhaps added later.

Thank you for your in depth comment. I know you appreciate poetry and do not comment lightly. It is very gratifying that you find beauty here.
Edited Date: 2008-05-26 05:58 pm (UTC)

Date: 2008-05-26 05:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] serendipoz.livejournal.com
*hug*

Love Joyce

Date: 2008-05-26 05:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tamiam.livejournal.com
Thank you.

Love Tamara

Date: 2008-05-27 03:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] athenais.livejournal.com
It has a beautiful rhythm, and the ending is powerful. So much spirit and strength in this poem! I want to read it over and over, finding the little nuggets of truth exploding in my mind like fireworks.

Date: 2008-05-27 06:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tamiam.livejournal.com
Thank you. This came out almost like stream of conscious writing. It holds a lot of my truth.

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